Teacher Feedback

In addition to showing our trailer to a focus group we also showed it to our teacher, she gave us some really helpful constructive criticism.

 Our teacher believed that there were a number of things that should be changed to make our trailer successful and to get us the best marks possible.

As a group we all agreed that the storyboard we had used was too linear so we decided to change the clips around a bit and changed the opening frame to the clip of us walking towards ‘Bonnie’, our teacher thought this was too random and that there was no real purpose for us placing it there.

Miss suggested that we used a clip that would vaguely introduce the audience to the narrative of the film. Also in this clip someones ear came into shot, this took the focus from ‘Bonnie’ which wasn’t what we wanted, this clips was also too wobbly, this distracted from the main focus area. Therefore it was suggested that we used a tripod to film as then there would be minimal camera shake.

The Clip where Chloe and Nusrat are talking needed to be re-filmed as neither of them were completely in shot and they kept turning their backs towards the camera, which muffled their voices and made them sound like they were mumbling. This made it hard for the audience to focus on the dialogue. Our teacher suggested we re-filmed this and researched into and filmed it in ‘shot-reverse-shot’

Our teacher thought that the ending was too linear and seemed like the end of the film, but also felt that the clip we used at the end was wrong as in horror films the ‘scary’ character is usually silent as this adds to the mystery of the character, however we had ‘Bonnie’ screaming into the camera, this therefore took away the mystery of the character.

Miss agreed with our focus group with how more narration was needed, we thought about having a narrator to speak over the trailer, however we finally decided on having ‘titles’ coming up in between clips as we thought this wouldn’t take away from the song we have in our trailer and we also believed that it would guide our audience through the trailer.

We also decided to change the music at the end of the trailer as it was too calm and innocent we wanted to build up tension and make our audience feel uneasy.